Hookers in Space

[talon]

OK, I wrote the first, quick rough draft that got all the main plot elements in palce. Then I reworte it to get theflavor and more details in place.

Now, I need to line edit it and make it zing, put in some good, memorable lines that fit with the plot. I have hints of some subplots that I may leave in or take out. I may take them out and make life harder for the MC - everything is coming together too easy for her. She hasn't encountered anyone evil or dealt with a harsh force of nature or really had anything worse than a bad contract and a theft happen to her.

It's a pleasant story, a happy story with a good happy ending, but it's all - common. And I say this despite it being all steampunky and space shippy.

The pace is plodding and it moves from A to B to C to D.

I have managed to keep the Victorian feel to the story through language choices, descriptives, and even the types of actions the characters take.

Right now, it has close to 7,000 words, many that are unneeded. There are a couple of scenes that can be cut and replaced with a stronger scene.

I'm happy with the story itself. I like the characters, even the invisible Mr. Maquadie. I like the port at this world. I like what will happen.

It just needs zing.